Natyr Lucio

Incredibly...thank you.

Thank you both for the tip, I changed it accordingly. But Jigsaw, if you're really that reluctant, you are not required to critique it.

The frogs represent the character's bitterness. She's only an outcast from society, and the people look down on this. Her window's broken because people are throwing rocks through it, and ...

Onomatopoeia That is an interesting piece... and the last line mae me laugh. I have nothing against its theme. Everything works perfectly. And yet...it's such a simple piece. Ahah.

The flow freaked out a little in the end, but nothing terrible. I could analyze it just fine. Four stars. Oh weird...I've never actually used stars to judge anything before. ...

Aha! Yeah, so I loved this one. There was no suspense or intensity or anything. It was pure romance and then the sudden shock of reality and it was great. ...

All right, the last line was really strong. However, while you got the meaning of the poem across, you used a really choppy flow to do it. The rhyme scheme ...

Well I got the idea for the first line from my avatar, and the only reason I have that avatar is because...I suppose I have an attraction to blue frogs. ...

Let's get something straight. That was hardcore poetry minus emo times three hundred. Uber kudos to you.

This put me in a mentality of silence, and I liked the sort of divine point of view it had. The fragmented end really added to its strength, I believe.